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    dots Submission Name: Bring Me Home.dots
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    Author: Carosuel
    ASL Info:    26/F/Twirlwind
    Elite Ratio:    4.93 - 96/73/28
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Unintentional anger, I thought I could put it behind me...


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    dotsBring Me Home.dots
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    I can feel the weight of his fists.
    I can feel the power and anger.
    It's blinding white, it's a sickening red.
    It's a deep blue ring, fading to amber.

    I can feel the poison running through me.
    I can feel the acid pumping through my heart.
    It's an angry burn--irritated and inflamed.
    It holds me together and tears me apart.

    I can feel the hopelessness.
    Most of all, I feel that desperate shame.
    Flooding my body, knee deep in gutter waste.
    My body is flash frozen while still aflame.

    And I'm still in love.
    How crazy can I be? Love so ingrained...
    How can I be so absolute of this?
    When my body aches, so afraid of the pain.

    I'm dreaming of you,
    Dirty nails and thick fists.
    I'm dreaming of you.
    Hollowed hips and rugged cheeks.
    I can see you pouring yourself,
    like a cup of tea...
    all steam and mahogany lips.

    Step toward me, Honey.




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      I have a similar experience so this was a bit hard to read and not feel as if you were talking directly to me. So you see you have done a good job explaining things.

    Time has been my companion. Reaching into a webb of healing and true love have saved me, dissipating not only the anger I felt towards the other person but the anger with myself.

    I think it is okay to see people behind monstrous acts. It doesn't make anything ok but ultimately forgiveness and understanding can not only free you but also them.

    Thank you for inspiring these thoughts today.
    | Posted on 2015-05-04 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      anger with a touch of confusion ending with a softness quite unexpected.

    being able to connect with this piece is somewhat unfortunate though im sure our experiences are quite different. i was dragged down an alleyway in a city on the other side of the world from home and experienced all kinds of unspeakable things and in the first few days afterward, after the shock and concussion wore off and i needed to rearrange travel plans etc, it was an angry burn. a very angry burn.

    It holds me together and tears me apart

    quite possibly the best words ive seen to explain how it feels...

    i know i was able to process my experience and continue my travels and by the time i got home [4months later] i was in better shape than my family was over the whole situation.

    maybe it was easier that i didnt know the person who harmed me. i couldnt imagine knowing the person who caused me such anger and such despair. the degree and range of emotions as well as the process to forgive someone you know is incredible.

    i dont think this piece is as angry as you think it is... i think its your way of processing and trying to move on. after my experience i poured my soul into poem after poem and they journeyed through all kinds of emotions and stages until i was just done. until i knew i had expressed it in all the ways i needed to express it and i was able to find new things to write about. but it took a good year until that point and i did revisit it every june 6th...

    take care, stay strong and be kind to yourself xx
    | Posted on 2013-06-07 00:00:00 | by impossiblyme | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful!!!
    | Posted on 2013-06-07 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]


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