Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Teleportdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: crashley
    Elite Ratio:    0.43 - 3/26/100
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 470
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1097



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsTeleportdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Laying sideways in bed, her body stretches out, lithe and arched like a cat, her chin tucked into her chest. She breathes softly -so softly- and something about the way she stirs and turns fitfully in her sleep casts a restless energy in the air. The downy hair on her forearms stands up with an electrical hum, the inner rumblings too great to be hidden even by her physical body. In her sleep, her skin betrays her.

    She seems almost translucent, impossibly fine and fragile, like rice paper. If you really cared to look, if you really /stared/, you might just swear that she was flickering in and out of existence. It's nothing that would catch you on first glance, but if you've watched her kind like so many have watched them, you might just notice a quiet glow evaporating off her skin. Like the heat melting the air into shimmering mirages, a soft amethyst shadow starts with depth in the her chest and radiates outwards through her fingertips, losing all definition until you lose track of it, just a train of thought vanishing right before you drift off to sleep.




    Submitted on 2013-06-08 23:33:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    197477

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Shut Up written by annie0888
    Carry written by saartha
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    The World written by jjd
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Love written by saartha
    untitled written by ShyOne
    Suffer The Children written by poetotoe
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    The Poems Death written by Mepoduo
    Reliquary of Writ written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (5) written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    Cover written by saartha
    Dream written by closetpoet
    Angel Eyes written by poetotoe
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    Comme un lion en avril written by Outlaw
    Lilitu written by endlessgame23
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Birds of a Feather written by poetotoe
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    The Old Mill written by Wolfwatching
    Deep Into A World Of Despair written by DeathTone
    Journey written by endlessgame23
    Redemption written by poetotoe
    i've missed written by mysalvation

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry