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    dots Submission Name: Doctor's Ordersdots
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    Author: awastedsky
    ASL Info:    22/f/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 116/151/98
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 568
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    dotsDoctor's Ordersdots
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    Doctorís orders:
    Shape up
    Ship out
    Without a doubt.

    Raise your hand
    Raise your gun
    Praise your God
    Dayís begun
    Demands again
    The life you lead
    Not in your head
    You canít be freed
    This is your life
    And his, and hers
    A roundabout
    A gift, a curse?
    Morning coffee
    And cigarette
    Rush out the door
    Try to forget
    Thoughts in your head
    Push them away
    You must get through
    Another day
    Desire strays
    From goals afar
    Riches and fame
    That fancy car
    White picket fence
    A kid or two
    Black Labrador
    The Jonesí who?
    A pension plan
    An asshole boss
    A family framed
    Concealed loss
    Rat race goes on
    Try to keep up
    A happy pill
    Your Starbucks cup
    Wash down the shame
    Keep moving on
    The end of day
    Not far along
    Your dinnerís cold
    Theyíre all asleep
    Crash into bed
    Wake to the beep

    The doctorís orders are clear.
    You have nothing to fear.
    Just keep moving on
    Till you disappear




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      That parting shot is great. Life has definitely gotten to be too fast-paced and competitive. Empty of substance but every minute taken. I enjoyed this.
    | Posted on 2013-06-14 00:00:00 | by buginamber | [ Reply to This ]


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