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    dots Submission Name: This Songdots

    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 419/435/131
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       --edited down from another poem I wrote

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    dotsThis Songdots

    this song is not about you
    it is not for or to you
    this song sings regardless of
    you or me or the brokenness of hearts

    this is not our song
    it is the song of the trees
    the song of the earth and the damp ground
    we will be buried in someday
    or the ashes we will be burned into
    or the decay that feeds worms

    it does not matter to the song
    it is so much greater than any one feeling
    of being alone

    Submitted on 2013-06-11 16:42:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I know the song is there although I can't quite hear it. Is it the vibration of the universe or perhaps the humming of God? I can't define it. Maybe when my body is taken by the worms to be used for continuing life, I will hear the song clearly and understand. Your words make me think on these things. Thanks. - Jim
    | Posted on 2014-05-20 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      there are a lot of songs about the song not being their song. cryptic i know but i hope you follow.
    and when i started reading this i thought that this was something along those lines... youre so vain gone wrong perhaps?

    forgive me.

    i like how you caught me off guard. how you turned the piece on its nose and made it an anthem for the lonely... a reminder that there are ways of escaping all of those songs and places and words that remind you of them or something they did or said or whatever.

    i used to buy cds and not listen to them so whenever i had a terrible day where everything haunted me i could turn on this brand new cd and have nothing to remind me of anything.. a way of rewriting perhaps?

    the way you make us seem so small and insignificant by talking of death and decay. putting us in our place. making the universe about something other than us. i like that.

    and yet you manage to amplify the alone at the end. it echoes and echoes which isnt a bad thing because im sure theres more thna one day that this song must be relied upon.

    well done.
    youve written a lot of ideas into this one piece.
    i like it. x
    | Posted on 2013-06-12 00:00:00 | by impossiblyme | [ Reply to This ]

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