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    dots Submission Name: Faith in Lovedots

    Author: Iram
    ASL Info:    25/F/from your world
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 50/62/55
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFaith in Lovedots

    The golden hearts beat
    Harder than they think
    Frightened from within
    Bleeding and dripping
    Quiet, fretted lub-dub
    Like yours without speech
    That I can still hear, I swear,
    Your capillaries, your tingle,
    Your glowing forehead
    And the raised brows
    Of your startled love
    And the first breath
    You just whispered
    I can hear you tried
    To live.
    I can feel your tremble
    And your striving flight
    Before you dived down
    Scared, scattered, small
    Life-stricken, fallen.
    They speak of my gloom
    Can they speak of my eyes
    And the curse of knowing
    How the golden hearts die
    Holding faith in love
    And stay hidden
    From the world,
    In the dirt.

    Submitted on 2013-06-12 13:59:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      you got me on "lub-dub"
    i am working on the medical field.
    i always enjoy hearing a heart beat.
    i love how this poem is made.
    good job. keep on writing.

    | Posted on 2013-06-25 00:00:00 | by w0ords | [ Reply to This ]
      Very impressive. You took me on a journey with this poem: from the shy beginning of love - life! I dare say; through its soaring and majestic, yet brief flight, and finally as it always has to be - to its descent, perhaps fall? freefall !
    I usually enjoy poems that have rhyme and rythm, but this one took me by surprise - how well you've even it out, it has a flow, and a balance and yet somehow it gives me a beautiful sad feeling. It reminds me of a lullaby.
    Trully one of the few love poems I will undoubtedly revisit.
    | Posted on 2013-06-14 00:00:00 | by Akiko Hime | [ Reply to This ]

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