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    dots Submission Name: change of heart. dots
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    Author: love_confusion
    ASL Info:    20/f/ct
    Elite Ratio:    1.32 - 10/53/57
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Rant/Love
    Total Views: 506
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       how can i move on, when the words you said to me still linger..


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    dotschange of heart. dots
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    We use to joke with each other all the time.
    Saying things like “I love you most”
    “I miss you the most” “No, no
    It is I who loves you the mostest”
    “But that’s not even a word” I would
    Say in return when you used the word “mostest“
    You would just smile.

    “I love you“. I said one night.
    As I was cuddled in your arms
    And you replied as usual “I love you
    The most” with a sleepy voice

    “Do you really? Do you
    Have evidence to support that statement”
    I joked. I’m not sure what I was expecting
    In response.
    Perhaps a half smirk.
    Or a simple chuckle..
    Or even your soft breathing
    After a couple seconds of nothing..
    I figured you fell asleep

    But then you kissed my forehead
    And closed your sleepy eyes ..
    And said;

    “mhmmm, my heart.”

    I guess what I’m trying to say is,
    When did you have a change of heart…




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      i really love the flow of this.
    made me feel like im the guy on this piece.
    lovely work. keep up the good job.

    -awoo
    | Posted on 2013-06-25 00:00:00 | by w0ords | [ Reply to This ]


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