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    dots Submission Name: A Dancer's Meditationdots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 137/243/158
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA Dancer's Meditationdots
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    Is it not the breeze that whispers through arcades
    Between their ancient shades, whilst trains
    Real, or of skirts undone, or of his dancer's ghost, no, not you, sweetheart -
    Are rushing at the wall?
    Whatever happens next is hidden, we cannot foxtrot through
    And sweep the night away out of its obscure premise, too
    much?, perhaps. Delay one moment longer, though, don't open
    up your gaze as I am quite content,
    not knowing.





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    ||| Comments |||
      I feel this has a lot more to do with everything else than its title. Y'know, I'm not normally one to criticize an author's choice of title, but I do believe that it allows a limited resource of what to expect.
    I didn't think I'd be reading something so profound, is what I'm trying to say.

    As I read along, I found myself relating to different aspects here and there. I found that although this was written from an entirely different perspective, and perhaps aimed for a certain audience, it's a brave piece- one that baffled not only dancers, but anyone else who opens their mind to it.

    I enjoyed it, and I'm wondering why no one else has commented. Quite glas I caught your username in the recommendations.
    Good job.
    | Posted on 2014-11-25 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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