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    dots Submission Name: your heart didn't skip a beat...dots
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    Author: caster
    ASL Info:    31.M.MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 136/280/161
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsyour heart didn't skip a beat...dots
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    "your heart didn't skip a beat, it thought of leaving you for me."



    i would have burned the tree of knowledge of good and evil to the ground/buried god in the ashes/fashioned a headstone out of a sigh of relief///

    i would have slept like a poorly attended wake/found you all over again lying among the leafs/wiped away erased memories//

    i would have spun your trust until you got caught in the rush/divorced the sun and went down on the moon/found more than scars well alone in the dark/




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      I read this twice and still don't know what to say.. Except that it's perfect.
    I have always admired your way with words, and this is no exception.
    I'm a fan.
    | Posted on 2014-10-17 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]
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    | Posted on 2013-06-19 00:00:00 | by Ethan Brody | [ Reply to This ]
      this is gorgeous!
    seriously!
    ive always loved your words but this... this is next level.

    i love the multi choice feel the dashes add despite the fact that none of the options are really ones anyone would be wanting to pick.

    i love your imagery. imagery is something this site has been lacking since ive made my return but youre use of imagery makes this a dear john letter like none other.

    yup. i really really like this.
    | Posted on 2013-06-19 00:00:00 | by impossiblyme | [ Reply to This ]


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