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your heart didn't skip a beat...


Author: caster
ASL Info:    31.M.MO
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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your heart didn't skip a beat...


"your heart didn't skip a beat, it thought of leaving you for me."



i would have burned the tree of knowledge of good and evil to the ground/buried god in the ashes/fashioned a headstone out of a sigh of relief///

i would have slept like a poorly attended wake/found you all over again lying among the leafs/wiped away erased memories//

i would have spun your trust until you got caught in the rush/divorced the sun and went down on the moon/found more than scars well alone in the dark/




Submitted on 2013-06-17 11:17:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I read this twice and still don't know what to say.. Except that it's perfect.
I have always admired your way with words, and this is no exception.
I'm a fan.
| Posted on 2014-10-17 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]
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| Posted on 2013-06-19 00:00:00 | by Ethan Brody | [ Reply to This ]
  this is gorgeous!
seriously!
ive always loved your words but this... this is next level.

i love the multi choice feel the dashes add despite the fact that none of the options are really ones anyone would be wanting to pick.

i love your imagery. imagery is something this site has been lacking since ive made my return but youre use of imagery makes this a dear john letter like none other.

yup. i really really like this.
| Posted on 2013-06-19 00:00:00 | by impossiblyme | [ Reply to This ]


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