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    dots Submission Name: Punching Dreamdots
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    Author: Esophagus1
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 231/279/149
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       This is a peice I wrote about a strange reoccuring dream I've had in which there is a strange person/entity that somehow provokes me (I am unsure how. As soon as the dream begins I am already severely angry and feel that this person/entity poses an eminent threat on me and or my loved ones) and I strike at their eyes and face with as much anger and hatred as I can muster and continue to pummel this entity only to find that they are unharmed and still standing there. I exhaust every angle of attack and every technique known to destroy this adversary and still they are unharmed and I usually wake up.


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    dotsPunching Dreamdots
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    We square off and put up our fists
    intent on total destruction.
    we strike eachother with broken wrists
    untill our bones defunction.

    I attack your face viciously
    hitting through you to concrete.
    You still stand there maliciously
    as if never knocked off your feet.

    I punch again with fury
    until recollection's blurry.
    Striking at you from all angles
    your eyes and jaw should now dangle

    Immortality; have we obtained?
    Insecurity; who is to blame?
    Man standing there in my brain.
    Man standing there never tamed.





    Submitted on 2013-06-17 14:13:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Trully eloquently presented. Beautiful flow and rhyme, just dazzling.Even though this poem was made based on a dream you can also pass it off as an allegory displaying just how insignificant a human's struggle is compared the Universe, to that higher entity : "God"; truly futile our efforts against the flow of time, against the web of Destinity, heck against our own human nature.
    Maybe you, yourself are struggling against something you cannot controll, or something is making you feel powerless against it , who knows who knows...nobody knows.
    Yet I must say amongst all your poems, this one is trully "complete" in my eyes.
    | Posted on 2013-06-17 00:00:00 | by Akiko Hime | [ Reply to This ]


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