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    dots Submission Name: A Fooldots
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    Author: raspberry89
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 5/18/22
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsA Fooldots
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    I underestimated the search
    and came out a fool.
    I looked for answers everywhere
    and everywhere found ghouls.
    I journeyed through the lowest valleys
    and with shadows as my fuel.
    I searched for this thing you call love
    And my encounters with love were cruel.
    So I took pilgrimage to Mecca
    and there I learned a golden rule
    I could trek forever but i'll never find what i'm looking for
    because you can't make a pilgrim from a mule




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      Very very touching well presented :)
    | Posted on 2013-06-22 00:00:00 | by dannythadog | [ Reply to This ]


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