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    dots Submission Name: Wasteland Warddots
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    Author: Ethan Brody
    ASL Info:    35 - M - Chile
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 440/205/78
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 648
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 663



    Description:
       This is the zillionth time I've tried to submit this. I know it's a bit choppy and rusty. I hadn't written anything in a long time.

    Please all kind of comments are greatly appreciated either positive or negative.

    Kind regards,

    Ethan Brody


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    dotsWasteland Warddots
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    WASTELAND WARD


    By Ethan Brody


    Decisions, indecisions,
    Doom, doubt, fire,
    Robberies, money,
    Inexplicable issues,
    Will they ever cease?
    Will the record grow?


    Brooding over ...
    I am in black
    And a dead drunk wench
    Has just come up.
    Easing ... smoothing ...
    What the heck?


    Will thou soon be slain?
    For I shall claim
    Thy conquered place
    And pierce thee
    With the soothing sword
    Given by the "king" of all professionals.







    Submitted on 2013-06-22 11:49:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ethan:

    You're right about your latest post being a bit rusty, but I was able to piece together a few observations.

    The first third of this post seems the most unified (although the final line deflects the entire discourse from a first person event to a third person observation: You may believe these are my thoughts, but they belong to another).

    The second third gives the impression of a one sided mating dance between a confused mourner and a drunken pursuer (someone who's not above shocking behavior: "easing...smoothing").

    The last third is a claim of conquest and ascension via feminine wiles (at least based on what you've written).

    Those are my thoughts based on your thoughts.

    Bill
    | Posted on 2013-06-22 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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