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    dots Submission Name: Making Lightdots

    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsMaking Lightdots

    There is a sparkling moment
    when we are no longer held within
    the bounds of our separate flesh.
    In touching we are touched,
    in a kiss, we are tasted. Exploring,
    we become known. Whispering,
    we are breathed, taken into the other.
    Lying together at that careful angle
    the place where our bodies meet
    becomes a prism in reverse.
    All our separate selves converge
    into a single thing. We open
    into one white brightness.

    Submitted on 2013-06-23 00:28:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Annie, I am so happy to have found your poems here,--they are like chocolates--I can't resist sampling another--then another. Alas, I cannot seem to find the wherewithal to contribute much in return for your sweet offerings.

    This is indeed a poem of passion, rendered perfectly with wonderful imagery. ( I loved the " prism in reverse")

    "All our separate selves converge
    into a single thing. We open
    into one white brightness."

    This last is beautiful, simply stated yet so very evocative of ardent love.

    (Sigh-h-h-h-s deeply, and meanders off---)
    | Posted on 2014-03-04 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      Very well written. Your form, structure and theme is very good indeed, I enjoyed reading this....

    | Posted on 2013-07-09 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This must be akin to what they're calling "sex magic" in certain circles. In any event it has a certain magic and is quite romantic in an intense way. Quite good work, invoking of ultimate emotion.

    Also, I'm sure there is a word for what the title here does. "Making Light" suggests on the one hand not taking something too seriously while on the other hand it means becoming in touch with the universe which is after all the ultimate as opposed to something scant. Tricky, tricky.

    Who knew Louisiana held such talent? ;)
    | Posted on 2013-07-02 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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