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    dots Submission Name: Our Shipdots
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    Author: ChrystalR
    ASL Info:    23/Female/Norway
    Elite Ratio:    5.14 - 126/121/58
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsOur Shipdots
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    Vermillion petals ignite my heart
    As I muse in wonder at your star-chart
    The places we`ll see, are within our reach
    The songs we`ll hear, to our hearts will preach
    And truth is simple, albeit yet unheard
    Your love is a ship, our odyssey bird

    Intellect carries me wide and far
    But border-space cannot be crossed by car
    The unconquered space, can`t be conquered alone
    The unmanned engine, is engine blown
    To keep our ship floating, to soar and dive
    Love is the fuel, which keeps it alive


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      Nice write, Crystal. I especially like the lines, "The unconquered space can't be conquered alone/ the unmanned engine is engine blown" . No unmanned engines in the game pf love, huh. Rhyme can be hard to pull off without sounding too sing-songy and childish, but I think you mostly accomplished it. Good job.

    Annie
    | Posted on 2013-06-30 00:00:00 | by annie0888 | [ Reply to This ]


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