Our Ship

Author: ChrystalR ASL Info:    23/Female/Norway Elite Ratio:    5.14 - 126 /121 /58 Words: 100

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Our Ship

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*** Vermillion petals ignite my heart As I muse in wonder at your star-chart The places we`ll see, are within our reach The songs we`ll hear, to our hearts will preach And truth is simple, albeit yet unheard Your love is a ship, our odyssey bird Intellect carries me wide and far But border-space cannot be crossed by car The unconquered space, can`t be conquered alone The unmanned engine, is engine blown To keep our ship floating, to soar and dive Love is the fuel, which keeps it alive ***

Submitted on 2013-06-25 05:50:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Nice write, Crystal. I especially like the lines, "The unconquered space can't be conquered alone/ the unmanned engine is engine blown" . No unmanned engines in the game pf love, huh. Rhyme can be hard to pull off without sounding too sing-songy and childish, but I think you mostly accomplished it. Good job. Annie

| Posted on 2013-06-30 00:00:00 | by annie0888 | [ Reply to This ]

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