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    dots Submission Name: Lostdots
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    Author: cyberpoet
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 28/18/22
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 585
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    Bytes: 452



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       Not sure why I wrote this or how it actually came out be very harsh to my peice.


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          Strange yet familiar things flashing through the barrier as I wonder through this new unfamiliar place.
          New faces escort me through this new realm I seem to have entered yet they try to lead me back stopping any progress.
          Shattered fragments of reality seeping through the cracks. Keep pushing me forward to find the truth to who I am...




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      Although, the poem is about being lost and somehow finding your way, I get a sense that the narrator is keen and actually lost at all. This is the clue I caught with the first line. Strange yet familiar things flashing through the barrier as I wonder through this new unfamiliar place. This is a new phase, but experience is guiding you along and alerting you of any possible red flags. This time not so naive and better able to handle and adjust through the journey. I think a venture through this new path is a little less frightening and more exciting, considering the wonderous possibilities. The poem flowed and the description was so pure,yet it was done with finesse. Short write,but, I felt I was there in your journey.
    | Posted on 2013-07-03 00:00:00 | by pioneerheart | [ Reply to This ]


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