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    dots Submission Name: Deception Availdots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    24/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 621/961/451
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Lonesome, spectral, fallen fog,
    Perverted in the wetness of my unveiling spirit.
    Escape, reveals the darkest wounds within,
    Destruction awaiting every corner you take.

    An untamed mind, slithers round a darkness,
    The decay to my line of life rotting deeper within.
    The shadows embrace, a falling waste
    Breaking in nightmares,
    In the hate I have become.





    Submitted on 2013-07-01 21:24:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It seems that although you are surrounded by darkness,<br />rnyou are repelled by it.<br />rnTo me, this shows a yearning for light. If you cannot rejoice in that fact, you can at least find a moment of comfort.<br />rnOne fact that should give all of us solace is that change is inevitable.<br />rnIf you have any faith in science, youll know that change is built into the universe.<br />rnIts only a matter of time as to when the light reveals itself.<br />rnAnd science might tell you that time is a matter of perspective, so you might have faith in your power to spark your own light.<br />rn
    | Posted on 2013-07-02 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      Such a handsome lad and plays guitar too! Your expression is rich like dark chocolate and coffee, both drugs upon which I regularly feed. I know nothing of what you speak, being of the opposite of my nature and so your words are of a foreign delicacy as if partaking in so much baklava and hashish while surrounded by dark purple flowers (I wish). Moondo munjava.

    Still I have not embedded myself with a shred (pardon the pun) of any talent with my purple axe. Always there is too many chores awaiting to fill my every moment aside from an occasional moment to enjoy a beer and entertain myself on the computer, whereby I am enshrining bits of my own self-perceived wisdom to persons apparently defending the indefensible - politically for the most part... still I do have my garden and my dog.

    Feel the magic... by definition it's something we don't understand so that shouldn't be a worry. And if one does think he understands, then that one has gone quite mad.

    | Posted on 2013-07-02 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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