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the date

Author: gwenn sundala
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this was written for me by a boyfriend many years ago. he wrote it for my birthday about the party my parents had given me. part one in a series of three

the date

the date

you invited me to
a place filled with lights,
sounds, people skating on ice, virtual guns
going off, pizza being chowed on
and above all this, there was you.

you at the table conversing with
your friends chowing on pizza and
when you saw me there was
a joyful look on your beautiful face.

we danced to the tunes of many
on the arcade platform of DDR
you beat me of course
for you are more experienced.

together we are happy
separated we are sad
but i look forward to the
next meeting.

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