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    dots Submission Name: the datedots
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    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 76/70/51
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Prose/Passion
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    Description:
       this was written for me by a boyfriend many years ago. he wrote it for my birthday about the party my parents had given me. part one in a series of three


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    dotsthe datedots
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    the date

    you invited me to
    a place filled with lights,
    sounds, people skating on ice, virtual guns
    going off, pizza being chowed on
    and above all this, there was you.

    you at the table conversing with
    your friends chowing on pizza and
    when you saw me there was
    a joyful look on your beautiful face.

    we danced to the tunes of many
    on the arcade platform of DDR
    you beat me of course
    for you are more experienced.

    together we are happy
    separated we are sad
    but i look forward to the
    next meeting.





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