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    dots Submission Name: the heart deceives and also doesn'tdots

    Author: pioneerheart
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 204/205/140
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       Sometimes we drop ourselves hard and other times we land softly on the ground again

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    There you are in a corner crying and dying inside with your heart feeling short of your worst nightmare. This heart that offered up its purest form of ecstatic bliss, wrapping itself around your soul with such fervor. How it had you falling happily yesterday. Now the shameful sting of love's betrayal is unbearable while the world goes on so cold without you. And you suffer and it is hard to breathe and not a word from the broken-hearted. These betrayals are so unspeakable. And yes, this depends on many things, quite tangible, just like a fleeting moment as a creature that you barely caught, more by sound than sight. The proof is many others were so suddenly flung from my play. It seemed it was a sure, natural time with a new flowering love. Yet, it doesn't always empty out the whole function of your stand. Not always such a sting or stain. Doesn't always take your breath away. So with courage we move on without the worries that sweet time mysteriously erased. And, I will not wonder if it's an intoxicating scenery with glorious sunrises or fullest moons so full for fools that captivates us towards oblivion. Instead, authentic quixote tangents send us towards the happy kicks we risk to somehow catch a glimpse of Venus's touch. We hope we will not shrink from love. Forever til we meet our truest fate.

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