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    dots Submission Name: Kitty Dreamsdots
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    Author: dancer-of-words
    ASL Info:    21/trans/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.6 - 167/158/74
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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    Description:
       I wrote this one day while being inspired after looking at my sleeping cat, Bella.


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    dotsKitty Dreamsdots
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    Little striped and green-eyed cat
    slightly gray, a little fat
    settled, napping upside down
    on my favorite silken gown.

    On a sunny summer day
    in a pool of gold you lay
    eyes shut fast, you eat whipped creams
    in your little kitty dreams.

    Tufty tummy all exposed
    piercing yellow-green eyes closed
    you eat the catnip till it's gone
    and prance and play the whole day long.

    Wings of birds and tails of mice
    fill your kitty paradise
    you catch, at last, the laser beam
    in your little kitty dream.

    You swipe a fish that silver gleams
    in a small and playful stream
    and walk upon the trellis beams
    in your little kitty dreams.




    Submitted on 2013-07-04 13:50:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is quite good. It is playful and spry. It is a good read for children. Imaginative and bright. You sustained the rhyming well, although the rhythm is a bit off in some places. I read it aloud and it's overall a good piece.
    | Posted on 2013-07-10 00:00:00 | by CNPerry | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to agree with Bruce even though I don't own a cat. His is quite pretty from the picture I actually saved of it.

    And it Rhymes! - What a wonderful idea for a poem. ;)
    | Posted on 2013-07-08 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      This is wonderful! It made my day. I'm looking forward to making kitty food today and it's a 5 hr chore, this makes it seem like so much less work. Thanks....

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-07-04 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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