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    Author: Kael Fenshir
    ASL Info:    26 / M / That weird place
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 17/57/52
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I asked her if I could stay
    she said that it didn't matter one bit
    I begged her that I could please
    and she said to go away
    I implored her to see it my way
    though she just didn't care
    I prompted her to sing with me
    and instead she screamed
    I told her how much she meant
    instead she showed me fear





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