Will

Author: Kael Fenshir ASL Info:    26 / M / That weird place Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 17 /57 /52 Words: 109

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Will

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I once had a son that I could call my own We dressed him up in glorious lion costumes His birthdays were full of mischief and bumble bees Embarrassment came his way when friends arrived We would give thanks to all the unknown gods Upon rickshaws we would laugh and play He took up my first original name She told me that she loved it My father scolded me for not being the best I gave them all I had My fingers lost touch Every single guitar covered in dust Death beds would see my end O' such loving members I'd depart Curly little hair I could not forget

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