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    dots Submission Name: Willdots

    Author: Kael Fenshir
    ASL Info:    26 / M / That weird place
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 17/57/52
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I once had a son that I could call my own
    We dressed him up in glorious lion costumes
    His birthdays were full of mischief and bumble bees
    Embarrassment came his way when friends arrived
    We would give thanks to all the unknown gods
    Upon rickshaws we would laugh and play
    He took up my first original name
    She told me that she loved it
    My father scolded me for not being the best
    I gave them all I had
    My fingers lost touch
    Every single guitar covered in dust
    Death beds would see my end
    O' such loving members I'd depart
    Curly little hair I could not forget

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