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    dots Submission Name: Contradicted Me || part 6dots

    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       ...I honestly have no idea what I intended to write, it just...happened?

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    dotsContradicted Me || part 6dots

    My skin, it breaks
    blood seeps passed my pours
    I watch it draw
    like tumbling swords

    at battle.

    Quick lash -
    sudden move -
    she fought too quick
    earning what seemed to be a gash
    but none other than air
    was surrounding them with no sudden

    of the opponents weapon.

    They dried.
    Yet they never died.

    My eyes meet painted cement
    the white seems so dull...
    innocent dirt
    piled up upon dust
    the walls so full

    unlike I.

    Scanning the room I pick up my jacket
    another night
    in the forest.

    Step by step
    and crackle by crackle
    I find myself where
    I sit my body
    and begin to act
    like i'm gathered in shackles.

    "I promise that death
    will never become of me,"
    I said
    "because being too young
    means being too free."

    With a still front-view
    these trees seem to listen
    to every word I utter
    and every star that glistens,

    so as I speak
    things become quiet
    and silence becomes
    what drowns me in it -

    In this.

    "A ghost, a phantom,"
    I continue
    "either shall do
    for I am a child
    and children never shoo."

    At least not for a while,
    no, not at all,
    we remain hushed
    until the grown ups are all gone.

    Submitted on 2013-07-08 02:14:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    I tend to write similar words that sound very well together, but not a lot of people know my meaning i am trying to make...but my meaning is that they find their own meaning...

    and for yours..i felt a soul being hurt by another person, and you tried to heal yourself, but you could not, so you went back, and then when you did, it's like you need to live in the past regrets, over and over again....
    | Posted on 2013-07-23 00:00:00 | by KeeperOfLight | [ Reply to This ]

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