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    dots Submission Name: Invisibledots
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    Author: CNPerry
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 20/27/21
    Words: 36
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    There's sadness in the presence of absence

    There's a dark that's more dark in the light

    There's a hole in the crowd

    That you have allowed

    Because you gave up the fight




    Submitted on 2013-07-09 23:43:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Forces a little thought, quite deep. Quite the poet kind of thing. That makes several of yours I've seen today that show the soul of a poet at work.
    | Posted on 2013-07-17 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      There's sadness in the presence of absence

    There's a dark that's more dark in the light

    There's a hole in the crowd

    That you have allowed

    Because you gave up the fight


    Yes, there is sadness, particularly when someone is conspicuously absent as opposed to being coincidentally missing. And I suppose this sort of absence/ loss would be a bit bittersweet for someone who's more than aware that the absent party is normally present. Just my thoughts on your thoughts.
    | Posted on 2013-07-10 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I dont know, I feel like it made me confused only because you said "presence of absence" almost a complete contradiction. Although I could generally say that this whole piece seemed "nonsensical" no offense, but theres a hole in what crowd, I do get the invisible reference and it somewhat makes sense but its probably too confusing for the average reader to take in, maybe make it longer to express the intent of the poem.
    | Posted on 2013-07-10 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]


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