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    dots Submission Name: Here again...dots
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    Author: Themissingshado
    ASL Info:    22/male/Seattle
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 23/52/32
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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       just writing what i feel right now...


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    dotsHere again...dots
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    Here again
    At the end
    of a another broken heart
    another lost love
    but i fell for you

    We dance through the sky
    when everything was new
    you eyes were so beautiful
    like crystalline amber, so blinding
    Nature took it's course
    now we constantly argue
    everything fell down between us
    now what am i to do without you.





    Submitted on 2013-07-10 00:48:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      first part is fine maybe capitalize stuff idk, but the second part

    We dance through the sky (maybe danced?)
    when everything was new
    you eyes were so beautiful (maybe another word for beautiful)
    like crystalline amber, so blinding ( like this line)
    Nature took it's course
    now we constantly argue ( change constantly to always) ( 2 syllable
    everything fell down between us
    now what am i to do without you.



    I feel your pain friend, my girlfriend told me after 5 years she wants to be alone and doesn't love me anymore, hang in there okay. Life is a real bitch sometimes especially when you think its going well.
    | Posted on 2013-07-10 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]


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