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    dots Submission Name: Enamored, I miss thisdots
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    Author: OneDarkFlame92
    ASL Info:    23/m/Numeanor
    Elite Ratio:    5.28 - 455/419/222
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsEnamored, I miss thisdots
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    I slipped into reverie
    as sunbeams bursts through
    midday summer showers,
    split open,
    as butterflies exhaled their escape
    in a numbing kind of vulnerability
    like the way you would touch me.
    and the rain came frantically
    but without darkness
    letting it run down my brow
    into my mouth;
    a mouth that had no reason to smile.

    and that was the last thing on my mind




    Submitted on 2013-07-11 16:54:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I got a good feeling from this, thanks. Very carefree memories type of thing.
    | Posted on 2013-07-17 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      If I interpreted this correctly, I must say I can relate pretty well. Not entirely, but I have an idea of this feel. I really like this piece, not only because its flow is ideal, but also because the way you described these events in only a few lines is astonishing. Good work.
    | Posted on 2013-07-11 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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