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Crumble


Author: Themissingshado
ASL Info:    22/male/Seattle
Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 23 /52 /32
Words: 65
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Depressed
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I was told today my goal were a waste of time.


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Standing still
Emptiness
A shell of a man
My goals shattered
Seemingly over

It kills deeply
So misleading
Hate consumes me
Just go away

No stay here
Why do I do this
Suffering is all I know
Without you
Just a vessel

Kill the music
Hit the lights
Fade to black
Deafening silence
And then
Love crumbles away





Submitted on 2013-07-12 22:27:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I think it is easy to get lost in what others want and not know what you, yourself really want in something or someone. While its easy to get discouraged, perhaps in loss and anger we are able to find beauty again than those who blind themselves to feeling-wanting something. Anyhow, that's what this makes me think of i it s ambivalence. But then again, i try to remain optimistic.
| Posted on 2013-07-13 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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