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    dots Submission Name: dust to dustdots
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    Author: Joachim
    ASL Info:    75 Male RSA
    Elite Ratio:    5.39 - 361/264/178
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Misc
    Total Views: 412
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 908



    Description:
       This poem reworked from the original "Dust" submitted long ago.
    The structure I rewrote it cannot be pasted as such by my tablet I use so I had to do the best I can.
    I am not English so corrections are in order.
    Regards.
    Jm


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    dotsdust to dustdots
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    From Dust to Dust!

    In the Midnight remoteness  of my mind,
    memories cast faint echoes on the canyon walls of my Soul.
    Far off in the most hidden spaces of my reality playful memories swirl like eddies of dust.
    My most sacred memories softly unearthed from their secret places embedded in soft drifting sands
    Revealing the fabrics of My Universe.

    Ghostly memories like swirling dust devils scurry shyly across the horizons of my realities tracing long lost ages covered by the soft drifting sands.
    deja vu imaginations from my memories.

    Dust devils sculpture with tiny swirls
    Visions from my dreams into ethereal secrets.
    Shaping the realities I long for..

    I am an Oases of Life In the vastness of my memories shaped by Oblivion now at rest.

    Become Dust!

    I am.




    Submitted on 2013-07-14 04:34:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Apparently not yet, even thought at some point we might even welcome a rest. Nice work, I'm hoping that my own dust shapes up as well.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2013-07-17 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Bruce.
    I am glad to be back in action.
    Missed u guys.
    And your comms appreciated.
    Will check u out.

    Keep well.
    Joachim
    | Posted on 2013-07-14 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      This is f%4king great. Please excuse my gross vernacular but I am overwhelmed. Fantastic, every word was a revelation of the depths of pervasion. I love it!!!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-07-14 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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