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    dots Submission Name: Trust in youdots
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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 62/87/67
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       just need to vent that is all please no rude comments....just wanted a little venting where someone couldn't see it


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    dotsTrust in youdots
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    you wrap your arms around me
    inside your warm embrace
    i cannot see the ice cold blade
    only feel it pierce my skin
    cannot scream or make a sound
    only let the blade sink in
    deeper inside me
    twisting my spine
    cannot move at all
    just watch through a window
    in my mind
    witness it all
    like it wasn't even me
    your voice echo's
    ringing my ears with your
    laughter
    slowly and softly
    sweat runs from my brow
    so dumbfounded
    as the laughter gets loud
    pounding in my head
    but i know you won't let go
    for all the power that you hold
    is only this blade
    put in my back
    and the sound of your voice
    is only this memory
    for a future me
    of the day you slip that grasp
    my back you'll never see
    my trusting heart
    will never let you touch me
    again




    Submitted on 2013-07-18 01:57:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a good safe place to vent. this is where i started venting and working through all the rubbish life threw at me and while i was venting people came along and helped shape my words and teach me about poetry until i wasnt just venting but using my situations to create beauty with words.
    and find a way of expressing myself and yet allow others to place themselves in the piece and feel like its all about them too...

    some people arent worth having in our lives.
    CNPerry is right... there is power in these words. i can feel the force behind them and the anger.

    written on corkscrew indeed.
    take care xx
    | Posted on 2013-07-20 00:00:00 | by impossiblyme | [ Reply to This ]
      This took an abrupt turn after first two lines. Snapped my head to the side. This was like it was written on a corkscrew. Spiraling downward. Pain. Whispers. Hushed screams. Then triumph at the end. Abrupt like the beginning. I will let this one settle on me. Come back. Critique again. But my first impression is....there's a power here.
    | Posted on 2013-07-19 00:00:00 | by CNPerry | [ Reply to This ]


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