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    dots Submission Name: Keep My Eyes on Youdots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/160
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsKeep My Eyes on Youdots
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    Emotional Flooding
    Keep my eyes on You
    Thoughts attacking
    Keep my eyes on You
    Temptations to the left and right
    Keep my eyes on You
    Wandering through the dark of night
    Keep my eyes on you
    Fear whispering convincing lies
    Keep my eyes on You
    Through tears and desperate cries
    Keep my eyes on you
    Through the lows of the valleys
    Keep my eyes on You
    On the mountain top peaks
    Keep my eyes on You
    Stepping out in faith
    Keep my eyes on You
    Walking on the water
    Keep my eyes on You.

    Keep my eyes on you Lord
    Keep my eyes on You








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      This reads like a mantra, a psalm, a prayer. At first the repetition was distracting, but about the middle of the poem/song it began to take on the tone of relgious ritual. This simple but heartfelt write is a great testiment to your faith and as such is just right.
    ~jan
    | Posted on 2013-07-31 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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