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    dots Submission Name: Contradicted me || part 8dots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
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    dots Contradicted me || part 8dots
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    My deepest apologies,
    for the hollow in my memories
    you cast with narrowed eyes
    Shooting bullets at I
    allow the past to roll down my back
    like an Angel's cry

    If hung at my shoulders any longer I'd double
    The tree largest in its wake ready to tumble

    The Earth would quake and those at my right hand flee
    to the farthest ends of the Earth
    I would blame them not
    As the farther away they walk, the farther I stray from humble

    Grief bestowed upon you
    as I only serve serpents
    The grandest, white snakes at my side
    not with a penny offered and nay servants

    Still to this day
    my lucid thoughts continue reeling
    and if I had the choice between shielding and exposure
    to me either could be quite appealing




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