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    dots Submission Name: You're a Day Dreamdots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 374
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsYou're a Day Dreamdots
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    You’re walking, sitting or talking
    you’re reading, folding or running,
    you’re doing something
    stop whatever, listen.

    Right now,

    I am putting my hand inside you,
    there’s a valve that can be turned,
    that takes you to another forever time,
    that doesn’t have to be right now

    Here, everything’s one,

    but not really

    You’re listening and you’re still you,
    you can feel the air of the tree’s flying by,
    see the snakes that are happy, and notice
    those centipedes are actually caterpillars,
    and Eve’s apple is just golden.

    When you look up
    the stars are bright
    figments of your
    imagination.

    Suddenly you’re back..

    You feel your sweat in a room of heat,
    or the warmth of your laptop under your hands
    maybe the rummaging in your house of people
    you might be on the bus texting on your phone,

    or your listening,

    you are always listening,

    With your touch,
    your eyes,
    your ears,
    and your heart.

    You can feel my hand inside you
    as it glistens through your inner being,
    slowly sliding through that darkness

    First moving your breast aside,
    the appealing void of you opens up,
    It’s a dark ripple, riveting with soft silver

    I’m the forever time that isn’t right now
    I’m the forever time when you see the images

    of “what could be”, and “what if”
    flow slightly over your current reality

    I can make them hotter,
    I can make them love you,
    I can keep you in a moment of happiness

    However,

    that is only until you let reality become stronger.

    Then you’re back to only walking,
    sitting or talking,
    reading, folding or running,

    you’re back to doing something.

    Back to the average,
    your loveless love
    your pessimistic life

    I torture you with the opaque reality of what could be.

    All you really want to do is look away,
    all day…

    Back to the flying trees, caterpillars and Eve’s golden apple…

    Let me be your escape…
    from the average day…




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