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    dots Submission Name: Tangled Heartdots
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    Author: AtrophyEmpathos
    ASL Info:    19 M California
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 45/55/29
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 796
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 237



    Description:
       just some lyrics...


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    dotsTangled Heartdots
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    There's a light crawling down the vines
    from the Tangled Heart of youth,
    In love with the violence of thorns,
    Embracing the pain,
    Seeking the next gentle torment,
    And every second beating softer...




    Submitted on 2004-08-04 04:09:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      "in love with the violence of thorns".. that is a perfect example of taking an over-used-almost-beaten-to-death image.. and making something new of it. that's real talent.

    i really like what you have here.. but it's a fragment.. do yourself and your readers a favour and expand on this.
    | Posted on 2004-08-04 00:00:00 | by girlinthephoto | [ Reply to This ]


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