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    dots Submission Name: Swimdots
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    Author: SirUndefined
    Elite Ratio:    0.93 - 0/0/2
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 532
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 688



    Description:
       this was just a freestyle i wrote when asked to spit a quick 12 bar verse....


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    dotsSwimdots
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    All these wanna be rappers talkin bout walkin on the clouds
    Blowning money on these girls man all yall some clowns
    Why yall trtyna stunt with fake jewelry and rented cars
    Talking bout rack city while you walk the boulevard
    Im ahead of my time something like a broken clock
    And my reign never goes away something like stocks
    Sober is my name but i stayed turned up
    And i get the party hype it swell up air pump
    Compared to my class all these hater is light
    They wanna see higher but i reach unseen heights
    I pull all the girls glass slipper cinderella
    And im swimming with no floaties down to earth a go-get-a




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