Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Swimdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: SirUndefined
    Elite Ratio:    0.93 - 0/0/2
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 355
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 688



    Description:
       this was just a freestyle i wrote when asked to spit a quick 12 bar verse....


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsSwimdots
    -------------------------------------------


    All these wanna be rappers talkin bout walkin on the clouds
    Blowning money on these girls man all yall some clowns
    Why yall trtyna stunt with fake jewelry and rented cars
    Talking bout rack city while you walk the boulevard
    Im ahead of my time something like a broken clock
    And my reign never goes away something like stocks
    Sober is my name but i stayed turned up
    And i get the party hype it swell up air pump
    Compared to my class all these hater is light
    They wanna see higher but i reach unseen heights
    I pull all the girls glass slipper cinderella
    And im swimming with no floaties down to earth a go-get-a




    Submitted on 2013-07-22 14:24:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    197659

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    A Thousand Reflections written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Hyle written by endlessgame23
    A Sense Of Things written by Daniel Barlow
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    A Worsening Effect written by Daniel Barlow
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    a leaf of shadow and edge written by Daniel Barlow
    Johnny's Cock written by endlessgame23
    Beauty Rest written by jackz
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    Dream written by closetpoet
    Adoration written by TheStillSilence
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    Untitled written by Daniel Barlow
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    FamiliarDemons ©™ written by kyserin
    The Human Harmonic written by Daniel Barlow
    untitled written by Outlaw
    The Abyss of Love written by poetotoe
    The Want written by Daniel Barlow
    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    The World written by jjd
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry