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    dots Submission Name: Cumbered Changedots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 41/64/78
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1067
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    Bytes: 1223



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    dotsCumbered Changedots
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    The moment lead her astray

    dragons wings
    unfold
    and a smiling darkness
    looks up
    to the clouded sky

    raging past the striking wind
    hearing her own thunder clap

    walls of reflections
    show her hesitations
    they start revolving
    into dissimulation

    she’s denied
    the semblance of imagination

    she tried to
    smooth back the unfit pieces

    that grants her to see the stars
    that are hidden in the day

    only to find
    turn pipe dreams
    are readily seen

    so she wonder which way?

    yellow cross roads turn gold
    as they whisper

    "Every path is opportunity"

    the trees sway left
    the sun shines right
    the earth shudders

    her feeling guts
    she reaches inside
    and finds her light
    her stars spill out

    recanting another
    dreamers dream

    these pleasing values
    hold no power
    fearless words
    cumber her with change

    she’s all confused
    is this happening to you?




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      Yes, I used my warlock box key and discovered that it incurred indenture and indemnity when I was hoping for release and escape. At least I still have what Pandora left me.

    Bruce
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