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    dots Submission Name: smoking dots

    Author: stormkrow
    ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51/52/39
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotssmoking dots

    So I walk around town
    smoking a joint
    and what do I see
    before my hallucinogenic eyes

    A little red fairy
    so fuzzy and warm
    who led me to
    the river of booze

    So I walk around town
    smoking a bowl
    and what do I hear
    by my shinny little ears

    A choir of penguins
    singing to a harpsichord
    a chorus so haunting
    I break my own leg running
    from them

    So I walk around town
    smoking again
    and what do I see and here

    A voice from behind
    saying hey honey you open
    or closed

    So I said give me enough
    to smoke to oblivion
    and I'll promise to send a post card
    from hell

    So I walk through town
    so bloody gone
    I see shadows fucking the ground

    I chased fireflies that lead
    me to the end of the world

    I 've smoked my self to oblivion
    and I will send you a post card from hell
    I am open for pleasure and pain
    just don't come down here through
    the river stixs
    and bring a lighter
    God dam it

    Submitted on 2013-07-22 21:10:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Mature topic, not graphic or anything, but certainly entertaining. I've always enjoyed repetitive things, because they kind of keep you in tune with the subject, but it's sorta messy in my opinion. Although, pretty fun to read. What's neat when it's not cool? Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2013-07-24 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]

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