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    dots Submission Name: Strange Hopedots
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    Author: Erreur
    ASL Info:    20 / M / Canada
    Elite Ratio:    7.32 - 19/25/14
    Words: 11
    Class/Type: Haiku/Misc
    Total Views: 873
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    Bytes: 82



    Description:
       Playing with words, and Haikus. Alternate title would be Manatee, but I think it'd give the twist away. What do you think?

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    dotsStrange Hopedots
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    Human life is dense
    Humanity sheds no light
    Manatees inspire




    Submitted on 2013-07-25 00:34:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was both dark and sweet at the same time. I love how this seems a critique on humanity, as opposed to a seemingly random other species, but one that faces difficulties and possible extinction. Sort of made me think about what species actually faces hardship, compared to which deserves to. Manatees deserve to live on, because they are adorable creatures. Humans are kind of depressing, at least humanity has more depressing factors than good ones. And one day I think we too will face extinction. Unless we start giving a damned!
    | Posted on 2013-08-06 00:00:00 | by ChrystalR | [ Reply to This ]
      we plod through the air
    fish stripped of our atmosphere
    liquid we call hope

    Just some thoughts on your thoughts.
    | Posted on 2013-07-26 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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