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    dots Submission Name: Social Networking of the Modern Agedots
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    Author: awastedsky
    ASL Info:    22/f/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 116/151/98
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSocial Networking of the Modern Agedots
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    A dull mind and shadowed eyes,
    we call it looking towards the future.

    Passion bleakens as reality sets in,
    the chill of the 9-5 pounds at your temples.

    The car stereo becomes your meditation,
    the drive-thru bags contain your sustinence.

    Hurry, hurry, hurry
    even if you don't know what you're running towards.

    Moments missed are barely given a second thought,
    you'll be the richest man in the grave.

    Terror, horror, angst and devastation
    you never thought you'd be longing for them again.

    Just to
    feel something.

    Your brain is numb, your thoughts have atrophied
    You succumb to the temptation of the white picket fence
    and then you post about it on Facebook.




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