It took me a bit to get past, "Swimming in the oddest motion" because I kept getting this silly scene in my head during that line. I kinda just pictured this out of place person trying to survive or endure the calm currents of this massive ocean, and there's this silly Lo-fi Pop music being played in the background. Maybe something like Velocity Girl or Tiger Trap or... I 'unno.
Gathering 'Serious Energy', I can say that the simplicity of it makes the best of it. It's short and sweet to the point.
Just a few personal issues. One being the use of 'blue' and 'bluest' I feel you could find something better in accordance with that line. The second being the over all length of the piece, I know that it is a personal preference where some say less is more, but I feel you could of continued on expressing the over all theme and emotion a bit more. Otherwise nothing horrific about it and nothing epic about it, just a nice easy read.