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    dots Submission Name: Kinship Overdosedots
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    Author: Kael Fenshir
    ASL Info:    26 / M / That weird place
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 17/57/52
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsKinship Overdosedots
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    Saying your name makes my mouth dry
    Singing your praise causes my throat to fry
    One giant desert in a concrete world
    Talk about a half hour travel
    Through the underground scene
    Blood pouring from the nose
    Sinuses blacken
    With sex on the lips
    I honestly had thought
    That our love was quick
    RIPE!
    RIPE!
    The foolish king said
    EAT!
    EAT!
    The peasant romantically begged
    It's all one giant ball of sadness
    From beginning to end




    Submitted on 2013-08-01 03:21:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really hate to admit this... but I don't get it. At All.
    | Posted on 2013-08-18 00:00:00 | by DaniEllis | [ Reply to This ]


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