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    dots Submission Name: Outside and Insidedots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsOutside and Insidedots
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    Sometimes
    I find myself outside of my own mind
    and when I look at you
    I see that you're all hidden inside
    thinking all those things
    that are quite endless

    feeling nothing
    I am afraid ill become nothing

    but that is only because
    I am over here
    outside my mind
    trying to find you
    in this far away place

    It brings tears to my eyes
    to think that I might be
    nothing
    when all the other things around you
    are nothing

    It feels like I could find you
    but these feelings keep me at bay
    I miss my dense freedom
    when all I worried about was my desires

    now I am thinking; what are yours?
    To be a person that is happy,
    or a person that also wants nothing?
    How does that work?

    Then yesterday, this quote found me:
    "There is always a reason why you meet people
    either you need them to change your life or
    you're the one to change theirs"

    I will take my chances
    maybe nothing isn't so bad
    but if nothings not the result

    Then I may have worried
    and may have cried
    over nothing.





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      A humanist write, well done.


    | Posted on 2013-08-02 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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