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    dots Submission Name: Entangling dots
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    Author: Outlaw
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 510/413/195
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I re-looked at another old poem. I hope you all enjoy it as much as I do/did.


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    dotsEntangling dots
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    I like to watch
    the many little
    choices you make
    unfold into a tree.

    I enjoy seeing where my roots are,
    commingling with yours
    and yet somehow
    asunder
    we manage to stand.

    I am foolish! I should be burned
    at
            the bark for,
    I am green of envy.



    Autumn sends yet its heralds;
    and I feel my leaves' souls writhing.
    Can you see me yet?
    Are you reddening now?

    I bark at you,
    my chester heart aflame
    because of your leaves,
    I bark in desperation.



    Let me cherish fruits -
    the ones born by bees.

    Let me eat fruit
    and consume sundered souls

    Let me sleep there
    sleep where I am with you.




    Submitted on 2013-08-04 11:33:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Quite clever here. I bark, I bark, what a lark.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2013-08-12 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Is this about that same aforementioned girl in the mini-skirt you were so enamored with. If so your definitely getting over your tongue tied. Crazy madly deeply you 'bark'! This was a lot of fun in an other handed, vicarious kind of way. It's good to see you writing.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-08-04 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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