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    dots Submission Name: Intolerable Sunshinedots
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    Author: ChrystalR
    ASL Info:    23/Female/Norway
    Elite Ratio:    5.14 - 126/121/58
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 574
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       This one is pretty straight forward. Just a piece on recovery and facing the good in life after you`ve had some rough years. I`m sure most can recognize the emotions in this.


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    dotsIntolerable Sunshinedots
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    She who has ventured the odyssey void
    Her spirit disrupted, numbed and destroyed
    And soul has been tattered, torn and weighed
    As she breaches the wall to a sunlit glade

    Neither shadow nor thunder to burn her soul
    Yet she feels like the convict, out on parole
    With no creatures of evil to claw on her fears
    On all of the living she conjectures their leers

    The chameleon void has possessed her mind
    Denying her solace, her tears are confined
    For those who have crawled in the grimmest of dark
    Otherworldly the sun, a stranger to her heart

    In the glade a temple is built by her hand
    Trembling she forms the bricks out of sand
    And the void mocks it each her sunny day
    That any temple she builds, isn`t meant to stay

    Such is the tale of a girl in the glade
    Who cautiously through the sunlight wade
    Bask she cannot, as the void pollution
    Masks her sun as the greatest illusion


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    Submitted on 2013-08-06 05:42:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      'The chameleon void has possessed her mind
    Denying her solace, her tears are confined
    For those who have crawled in the grimmest of dark
    Otherworldly the sun, a stranger to her heart'

    That part was my favorite. There was something about this part that just yanked on my personal depths; my deepest of caves.

    I honestly enjoyed this a lot. I feel like like I was at a secluded theater when I read this. You know what you're doing, yeah? Seems like it.

    Huh. Just noticed that you're from Norway. That's like...so cool. I've always wanted to live in Norway for as long as I could remember. I don't like where I am, but I guess I have to wait. Oh gosh, my dreams of ending up in Norway! I think finding your page made my day. Thanks.
    | Posted on 2013-08-08 00:00:00 | by Kael Fenshir | [ Reply to This ]


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