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    dots Submission Name: Six String Moviedots
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    Author: Kael Fenshir
    ASL Info:    26 / M / That weird place
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 17/57/52
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSix String Moviedots
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    I've made my dues before your eyes
    It's electrifying,
    How my mind loses sight of your skies
    The plan is predictable
    Or maybe it's acceptable
    I slave unto my work
    Your flesh is so delectable
    Pieces of our marriage
    Switched on the loop
    Just like my favorite movie
    The one called 'Duck Soup'
    Philanthropist on top of the world
    I have nothing to give
    I have nothing to hide
    The fumes spread wide
    To the thinnest of the wind
    It's incredible how we lost our kin




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