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    dots Submission Name: Sonnet - The Chimesdots

    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 75/182/217
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Another English Sonnet under Iambic Pentameter. I do enjoy writing these very much, any feedback or just your thoughts. Please do enjoy.

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    dotsSonnet - The Chimesdots

    Crisp, the cool morning air was nostalgic;
    haunting with an overture- chirp and clang.
    Foggy verdant memory- heraldic,
    whispers cascading in the wind- it sang.

    Desire more- addendum a moment,
    pleasuring with a warming golden grace.
    Loving laughter gives sound to atonement,
    fingers in the air conduct clouds; we trace.

    Each choice we make- a twist in melodies,
    building towards a true path in life so short.
    Treasuring our unwritten poetries,
    soon to be judged standing in empty court.

    Furious thunderstorm- deaf to the chime,
    remember we're the music of our time.

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      Fine sonnets, you have made this form your own and I like reading them so much! I'm still unravelling the argument of this one: my town has a central church with a bell-tower, eight bells and practice on Thursdays. They play on Sundays. Sunset, the magpies join in, who are always varying their songs. I wouldn't be surprised if you live in my town!

    I'm surprised at how closely you stick to this exact verseform. That's not a negative criticism. I don't know what sort of comment it is but maybe you are just an unusual sort of person!

    I believe in the Last Judgement but I reckon it happened not long before I was born, since that would account for my experiences since then. The angel Gabriel actually survived as Satchmo and I cried when he died. Nobody else realized he was in disguise.
    | Posted on 2013-08-14 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      It's nice to see rhyme from time to time. Good work in the story telling also.
    | Posted on 2013-08-12 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you stuck true to the theme in this poem from beginning to end, which is fabulous. It speaks to me in a few ways- the nostalgia of the past and also how our choices effect us in the future. Each of us a chime, our reverberations rippling both backward and forward through time. Wonderful all around. Not my type of poetry but I like the message very much.
    | Posted on 2013-08-09 00:00:00 | by KotaNashi | [ Reply to This ]

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