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    dots Submission Name: Three Days In Octoberdots
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    Author: Kael Fenshir
    ASL Info:    26 / M / That weird place
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 17/57/52
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThree Days In Octoberdots
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    Here's the church
    Here's the steeple
    How did one such as I
    Fall in love in October?
    I saw her once in town
    Or at least a replica
    Hence, furrowed my brow
    We met only thrice
    Shared a natural fire
    Played my guitar
    In that darkened cellar
    Here we go
    The end is nigh
    Licking every finger
    Just to get high




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