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    dots Submission Name: Creation of Origins (Revised)dots
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    Author: lolaxelmo
    ASL Info:    23/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 34/37/38
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsCreation of Origins (Revised)dots
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    the idea was not my own—
    though i claimed, convinced myself its creator—
    planted, seeded through a reluctant transfer
    of words, processed from formed thought sans filter
    received through the subconscious.
    the idea could have been my own, the origins of
    originality sparked within the lobes
    fired from my own thinking into words shaped
    true to form with choice, though
    really manipulated by mediation
    snuck through the vision of consciousness
    i call mine.




    Submitted on 2013-08-08 12:28:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Have you heard of the word maieutic? A Socratic philosophy whereby you plant the seeds of ideas and then allow the listener to think they came by the thoughts this incurs by themselves. This appears to be what you are experiencing here. Actually, of most of the thoughts we have are, at least partially, the product of such cloud seedings. It's a tough condition to avoid!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-08-09 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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