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    dots Submission Name: Orange Stressdots
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    Author: Kael Fenshir
    ASL Info:    26 / M / That weird place
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 17/57/52
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsOrange Stressdots
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    My eyes are swelling
    From that lovely orange dress
    My mind is sinking
    From the reminiscent stress
    If you think you can do it
    Share your feelings with me
    Though I am small
    I have lots of love to give to thee
    Shakespearean words?
    Can I slip on my slurs?
    It's frighteningly simple
    How far our love can go




    Submitted on 2013-08-08 19:17:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Quite nice and a good start for the morning, orange and all...

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2013-08-12 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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