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    dots Submission Name: Musical Stars & Kittensdots
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    Author: Kael Fenshir
    ASL Info:    26 / M / That weird place
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 17/57/52
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMusical Stars & Kittensdots
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    The band's playing tonight
    So come for a ride
    There's plenty of space in the venue
    Way up in the sky
    Drifting words
    Caught up in my life
    When I was young
    This little kitten sliced up my life
    Music is blaring
    Milkshakes are finished
    Think of that time when
    Wait, no, I went ahead
    Pull it back
    Even further now
    Down to bare bones
    I'll lay you on the grass
    Beneath those stars
    We'll never see
    I hate living in the city
    But I'll let you be




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      This is definitely different that what I have read from you so far and yet the voice is familiar. I believe that in itself shows talent. This was a sweet nostalgic piece with a bit of edge to it that made it different. I like the humility that I get, you are blunt with your words. Good stuff.
    | Posted on 2015-07-04 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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