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    dots Submission Name: Faith grows in the darkdots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/160
    Words: 253
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Poem about faith, and true treasure


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    dotsFaith grows in the darkdots
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    The flower blossoms
    And reveals the centre.
    Beauty and colour
    Can captivate
    And lead the eye to the outer.
    Rein it back in.
    Focus on the middle!
    The petals always fall away
    Before the fruit comes forth.
    Will you be a petal?
    Or will you wait
    In the heart of the still small space.

    Yes, yes.
    It seems only nothing is coming
    For ever such a time.
    Looking with these eyes
    Only confirms what is now seen
    Let all your petals fall away.
    (Not yourself)
    They are the nothing
    That look like something.
    Fool’s gold, that's all.

    But yes.
    Potatoes grow in the dark
    And seem to do nothing
    For ever such a time.
    Then suddenly...
    A sprout!
    Above the ground and into view.
    The green leaves
    Grow ever so tall.
    But here too can we be fooled
    Because the green leaves
    Are not the treasure.

    Potatoes grow in the dark
    And one day the gardener
    Out of the dark ground
    Brings forth
    Into the light
    The fruit of his labour.
    Is the treasure the fruit?
    Here too can we be fooled!

    Trust then in the hands of the Gardener
    He is your true treasure.
    Look first with the eyes of the heart
    Let faith and hope and steadfastness
    Be your companions.
    Promises are fulfilled first in the dark
    Before they ever sprout into the light.
    Will you wait in the heart of the still small space?

    Lord grant us the grace to wait, and wait well.
    Amen.




    Submitted on 2013-08-10 03:08:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is just my interpretation.
    this makes me see people growing continually shedding more of themselves until, like a rose, they bloom. then everyone sees the beauty on the inside of them.
    i liked the stanza with the potato it was a beautiful image.
    i have read it a couple of times, but i lose concentration towards the middle. maybe try meshing idea of the rose and potato more with the garden thought i dont know just an idea.
    it was a good read made me feel peaceful.
    | Posted on 2013-08-18 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]


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